Wednesday, December 13, 2006

Lacey/Rainey Opener v2

Update: Front section has gone through a major overhaul and now I need to back off, sit down and read it for coherence myself and then I'll repost it. Thanks to all who replied via email and esp. to Francis who used the actual freaking COMMENT THREAD :)

Stay tuned...brb


Blogger dirty dingus said...

I like it. Introduces the players well

Only one minor detailette. Assuming the plane is flying Strasbour-Paris then it is almost heading due West which means that the sunrise will be directly behind the plane and not very visible

Oh and there's a word missing in "I don't you don't want to collect the bounty on him but must you steal the spotlight back?"

Tue Dec 12, 02:40:00 PM CST  
Blogger -sry said...

Arrggghh.... Geez, Louise, Francis do you have to keep pulling me back to reality??? But I want him to be watching the sunrise :) waaaahhh :-)

Yeah, I knew this (Strasbourg to Paris), have the Google maps printed out even, and just...dunno, envisioned Rainey sitting there and got inside his head and what HE would be doing is looking out of the window and thinking about the sunrise.

Hey, at 30,000 ft or whatever (maybe lower for a short flight like that) he definitely wouldn't see the sun anyway, just the light in the sky. Close enough :P

How LONG is that flight anyway? Can't get that on the airline web sites, though admittedly, I only tried Air France and BA and the AMEX interface to them all. It's a couple of hours commercial, right? Maybe a little longer, 2-1/2 to 3 going via chartered small craft?

I need to email or GoogleTalk to you about this :)


Tue Dec 12, 05:09:00 PM CST  

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